sea foam / moonrise / troughs of white petals / revivalist skulls of breath from a blistered wind / I lied on the floor / the window had twig elbows / the ancient fall, I bled white like the ants on the window-ledge.
I tire; tree fingers
tie their umbilical cords
onto the late birds;
field and rocks drum / moth wings / and lettuce-white bugs on the wall / mother, father / are happy / tree and limb / the ocean hides the stars /
am I near death? / I don’t know / mists of the horizon / numb then distractedly entwined / two of the sea; mouth resurrects the waves / the moonrise is red / fingernails whitened by the month / cat eats the trout / eyes reflect / into the child frost / tears snake to the moon / the moon is a child / the moon is dead / boney, the roots / of tree and mouth / happy birthday, darling, we love you / mother, father say / midnight / I count my knuckle bones / and I love them too /
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Written for the dVerse prompt:
“For this challenge, I ask you to think about your own birthdays, ones from the past, one that is coming up, a memorable one, or one you are dreading. Whether it’s birthday cake and balloons, a quiet glass of wine on your own that turned into something memorable, or a complete disaster, I’d like you to share a birthday with us.
Aim to write no more than three tight paragraphs, followed by a traditional haiku that includes reference to a season.”
31 responses to “two of the sea.”
I admire the form and layout of your haibun, Lucy, and the surreal birthday by the sea. I especially love the image of the ocean hiding the stars and the haiku.
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Thank you! ❤
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Gorgeous images within your non-traditional haibun. Especially like “lettuce-white bugs on the wall” and “the window had twig elbows”. There is much more between the lines….
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Thank you so much, Mish. ❤️
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sounds like a very strong bond with your parents … most unusual imagery!
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My parents and I do indeed have a strong bond. 😃
And yes, I write the strangest things. Hahaha!
Thank you for your lovely comment. It’s always appreciated. ❤️
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sorry Lucy, my comments come from my heart … hugs to you and your parents!
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No, no, please don’t apologize. I knew what you meant. ❤️❤️ I thought it a compliment since I acknowledge my stream of consciousness writing as strangely put. I don’t make an easy read, there’s always things in between the lines I hide.
Thank you again and hugs back.
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yes and personally I struggle to read them, maybe I will get more adept as I get to know you better 🙂
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So much imagery! Strange and wonderful ✨
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Thank you. ❤️❤️
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Very bold of you to write prose with the line breaks evident, so that we could see poem and prose at the same time; and putting the haiku in the middle was cool too. Sometimes I’ll write an opening, mid & end haiku, and/or make one of the paragraphs as free verse–but you are clear off the grid with this form; I dig it.
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Thank you, Glenn. I’m glad you think so and I am especially happy you enjoyed this piece. I thought the line breaks would be fitting here.
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Vivid images which sound like the celebration of life which doesn’t happen without birth.
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That is true. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece. Much appreciated! ❤
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You’re very welcome, Lucy.
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Loved the approach, Lucy. Uniquely crafted. Salute.
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Thank you, Ron! 😀
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The three fingers tying the umbilical cord to the late birds really got me wondering!
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I kept thinking back to the trees by my window and how I hear the birds in the morning—probably around seven or eight. I think of them being perched on those trees before they fly away. That was the main inspiration for that particular line.
So glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for reading it. 😃
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you have written such vivid and tender and beautiful phrases. adore the unique structure you made and that full of love ending.
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Aww, thank you so much. 💕
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you’re welcome!
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I love this Lucy: so many powerful and thought-provoking images!
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Thank you dearly. 💗
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Brilliant 😊👏🤗
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Thank you! ☺️
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Extraordinary effort, Lucy. Love the layout and the breaks fall as near perfectly as they could!
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Thank you, Walter!
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a celebration of all birth (days) (K)
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❤ ❤
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