will I drown? the wind twists, and we kiss the flowers; seize the backbone of the root, where our blood is ours. the tree trunk can’t see death;
unparalleled, my father disintegrates. the sunsets are claret as they burst. the glass region, eyed by the ants, flourishes in the light by remembering; eyes, pressing to abandoned wounds in the blood-flow of my poems; i have nothing left to say to you,
like the foreign moon with her breasts,
sunken to asylum
the ashes of Cimmerian tombs, dispatched to the same darkness we see. there is an absence of the black violets, where only dreams are the entryway to my subconscious; self-portraits of my mind.
the moon bled
and death retraces memories
this person they no longer know; the woman who is myself. poking like the worm,
“in their dreams
they sleep with the moon.”
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Written for the dVerse prompt: Write a piece of flash fiction or other prose of up to or exactly 144 words, including the given line, “In their dreams
they sleep with the moon.”–From Mary Oliver, “Death at Wind River”.
46 responses to “nothing left.”
Beautiful! I love how you use human emotions and substances (tears and blood) and apply them to nature and objects. It’s all so cleverly crafted and it flows smoothly 👌
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Thank you so much, Hannah. ❤
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You’re so welcome 💖💖
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Love this especially; “there is an absence of the black violets, where only dreams are the entryway to my subconscious; self-portraits of my mind.” Your use of imagery never ceases to amaze me! 🙂
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Aww, thank you so much! I’m so glad you enjoyed those lines and I am elated by your words. Thank you again.
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Your imagery of darkness works so well with the Quote… maybe it’s only in the dreams it’s possible to find solace.
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Thank you, Björn. Dreams can be an escape or they can be a mirror of nightmares. I find it goes both ways.
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I was tempted to try and work out what this means, but gave up. I do like the absence of black violets 🙂
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Hahaha. I don’t think I make it easy, right? 😁 Very happy you like the imagery in that line, though.
So, for the meaning, the ideas I had in mind were change. People change, and sometimes recognizing it in yourself can be a powerful, if not dissociating, experience.
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I’ll have to reread now I have the map 🙂
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Such beautiful, if dark, imagery. It’s like being in the middle of a fantasy.
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Thank you greatly!
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A fantastic write
Happy Monday
Much💛love
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Thank you. ❤
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I enjoyed the darkness of this piece, Lucy, the personification of a flower with a backbone of root and a tree trunk that can’t see death, the zoomorphism of a woman poking like a worm, the claret sunrises, and the phrase ‘abandoned wounds in the blood-flow of my poems’. And I want to know why there is an ‘absence of the black violets’ – what happened to them?
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Thank you so much, Kim. I’m ecstatic you enjoyed the imagery in this piece. Now, as for that line, I do not particularly remember what I had in mind for it. The essence of the poem is about change and not recognizing yourself for the better, while all the same, you can find things or people that try to reflect the person you once were. It is there that one realizes that they are different and no longer the same.
The absence of black violets can be just that. Something evolved within the subject of the poem. They’ve left those violets behind, and those flowers turned black; wilted, dying. That part of the individual is dead and left to the past. But, it is for the better.
Thank you again for your lovely comment and feedback. It’s much appreciated. ❤ ❤
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You’re more than welcome, Lucy. I enjoy reading your work.
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“the tree trunk can’t see death” 💛💕💓
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Reminds me of 1st Corinthians, “when I was a child I spake as a child, but I put away childish things” (paraphrasing)
“this person they no longer know; the woman who is myself.”
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That’s a fantastic and in-depth quote. It kind of summarizes what I intended for this prose-piece, overall. Thank you so much for your thoughts as well. Always appreciated!
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You’re welcome, Lucy.
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Awesome work, Lucy. I esp like ‘sunken to asylum’
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Thank you! ☺️
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change is challenging and loved ones will always try to press our buttons expecting/wanting the reassurance of previous reactions … yet when we truly change that pattern will reformat …
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Indeed. Only we can break the cycle. Thank you for reading. 💕
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thanks for making us all think!
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I love the description of your demise…. first of us viewing you …. eyes, pressing to abandoned wounds in the blood-flow of my poems…
and then… to the fact that you never leave us…. the woman who is myself. poking like the worm,
in their (our) dreams
they sleep with the moon.
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A very intriguing interpretation from those lines. Thank you so much for your feedback and comment, Dwight. ❤
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Perhaps I missed it a mile or two!! :>)
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Your inimitable style still rules; many fine lines and wordsmithing. Somehow it creates alacrity regarding our mortality; liked it.
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Thank you, Glenn!
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The imagery was divine. I am glad I read your response to Kim to help me better see where you were going with this (which confirmed what I thought I had understood!)
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Thank you so very much, Dale. So glad you enjoyed this piece. ❤ ❤
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I did! 💞
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Grief and loss come from this for me, and the disorientation that goes with it, poignant, dark and real.
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❤️❤️❤️
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Dark, delightful, and wise Lucy — excellent writing!
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Thank you, Rob!
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Exceptional writing, Lucy. I love “there is an absence of the black violets, where only dreams are the entryway to my subconscious; self-portraits of my mind.” So gorgeous! 🖤
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Thank you so much!
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The use of metaphors, even more, personification is exceptional in all your work. Beautiful. It’s great to have someone to learn something so beautiful. ❤
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Thank you so much, Smita. 💗
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Welcome. 🙂
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Very dark and blood-filled. Speaks to me of death, loss and isolation. Is the glass region you speak of in France, along with the claret? Just wondered.
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