infinite in papery moons
why must I lay
under your foot
in the voluptuous
sea?
madcaps and glassed eyes
her next death
in a million moons I’ve yet to meet;
god’s leavetaking, nothing left for you
but a ghost of gardens.
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Reposted for the dVerse Open Link Night.
57 responses to “Ghost of gardens.”
I’m really enjoying your short poems series, Lucy!
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Thank you!
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This is awesome! The poem is short but yet conveys so much meaning! I’ve gotta try this sometime!
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Thank you so much, and yes, definitely try it out. A poem a day is a neat challenge, especially with the limited amount of characters you’re limited to on Twitter. 🙂 I’m hoping I can keep this up for a whole year, but who knows? That’s the fun in it, I guess!
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So exquisite in its brevity and ache, Lucy! 💝
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Thank you so much, Sanaa!
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excellent finale to a great poem
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Thank you!
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“…a million moons” and a “ghost of gardens…”
Love the alliterations & all the other aspects of this brief work, Lucy. Awesome.
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Aww, thank you Ron. 🙂
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Lucy, this is wonderful- I love the ending.
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Thank you so much!
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I too am enjoying your short poems, Lucy, and the way they haunt me, especially the phrase ‘infinite in papery moons’ and the final lines.
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Thank you, Kim, so much. 😀
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Those final lines are killer,”God’s leavetaking, nothing left for you but a ghost of gardens.” I flashed on the state of mind of the naked Jews in the Nazi showers as the gas came on. One vocabulary note given to me by an English teacher. “It’s lie not lay. Chickens lay, poets lie.”
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Thank you, Glenn! I have heard of something like that before and I might switch it to lie. That’s a good way to remember it, though. 😀
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Just love the way you expressed yourself.
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Aww, thank you. 🙂
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Emotionally intense with such a deep note of sorrow.
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome, Lucy.
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This short poem is emotionally deep felt and the way you crafted every phrase.
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Thank you very much. ❤
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You welcome. 🙂
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Good writing, Lucy! Beautifully crafted. You can sense the thoughtful choice behind every word.
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Thank you, Susan!
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I love the way you play with sound in your work Lucy. It is a joy to “pronunciate” through your pieces — and love the hallucinogenic images you create. Always a blast to read.
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Thank you very much, Rob. That means a lot to hear that!
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Beautiful crafted and point made!
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Thank you!
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I remember this one made me smile on twitter! I love the questioning in this, I feel a type of rebellion going on. Maybe that’s the tone I’m inserting into it in my own mind though. You had me at papery moons though. ✨
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Yes, I remember you said something like that! 😀 Thank you so much and it is definitely a rebellion in some ways. The narrator no longer wants to be under the foot of anyone anymore; they’ve had enough.
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I’m glad I read it right then. I felt the fight in there! 👊
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Oh, wow. this gave me shivers.
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Thank you. ❤
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Very nice images Lucy! “Dust in the wind… all we end up being is dust/ghost in the wind!”
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Thanks!
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Reading your poems, including this one, leaves me feeling humbled.
Also, now I know what a ‘madcap’ is – thanks for that!
Yours,
David
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Thank you, David. ❤️❤️
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This was an awesome poem! I’m so glad Phoebe connected me to you.
Coincedently, I also submitted a poem as my favourite post! 😁
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Aww, thank you. ❤️❤️
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I imagine that ghost of gardens as aches reaching for paper moons, far out of reach.
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I like the way you think! I love that visual you got from my poem here. 🙂
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“infinite in papery moons” and “a ghost of gardens.” I love those phrases–so mysterious, yet evocative, too.
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Thank you so much.
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You’re very welcome.
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This is the line that spoke to me,
“God’s leavetaking, nothing left for you but a ghost of gardens”
I hear abandonment in this.
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I definitely had abandonment in mind with that. Thank you so much for your feedback. 🙂
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Great stuff! Don’t stop publishing!
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Thank you! And I’ll definitely try not to. ❤️
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Nice
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Thanks!
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So much to love about this poem. Papery moon, voluptuous sea.. just every line full of “ah ha!” moments! Brilliant!
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Thank you! ☺️
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The brevity of diction that matches the metaphorical images makes the poem splendid, Lucy
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Thank you very much, Henry!
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Always my pleasure, Lucy
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