In two moons,
a pseudoknot is in my blood
begging to close
about my last breath
it wasn’t the echoing of gargoyles
in our death-beds
wandering our roots
taken more by wiles
and gutted solstice
endless in your eyes
I know
you’re killing me
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Written for the dVerse quadrille prompt: Write a poem of exactly 44 words, not including the title. Include the word “knot” in some form.
31 responses to “Two moons.”
I love the limitations of a good prompt. Despite the constraints, your work retains a certain wildness that I’ve come to associate with your poetry – it’s only after a few more readings circling my head whereupon I go, “Ah, not just beautiful words, beautiful symbols.”
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Aww, thank you for your kindness and insight.
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Wow, Lucy…impressive wordsmithing; especially like the gargoyles and that ending!
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Thank you, Lynn!
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I believe that knot of a clot will get you before the gargoyles! Well done Lucy!
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Thank you, Dwight!
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I love the sense of internality in this piece! I was reminded of a labyrinth while reading it. Great writing! ❤
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Thank you!
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I like the imagery of the pseudoknot begging to close and the gutted solstice, they both infer a splitting to me, like two moons, and I sense the division is deadly. Take two aspirin and call me in the morning! 😁
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Hahaha, thank you!
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Ah, Lucy, you went with the pseudoknot and made it into a split personality! The ‘echoing of gargoyles’ and ‘gutted solstice’ are going to haunt me for the rest of the day – and it’s only just started.
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Oh wow, thank you so much Kim! 😁
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Lucy, even limited to 44 words your imagery far exceeds the boundaries of your lines.
❤
David
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Aww, thank you David. ❤️
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When I read Mish’s challenge to use ‘pseudoknot’ I thought ‘If anyone can do it, Lucy can!’ You did not disappoint: a fine and original quadrille!
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Hahaha! Aww, thank you Ingrid. Your lovely words put a smile on my face. 😃
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😊
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Such amazing imagery, and the way you worked in “pseudoknot” is fantastic! I love “echoing of gargoyles.” (They do–and it’s creepy. 😀)
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome!
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❤️❤️
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Wow very good apk
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Thanks!
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Gutted solstice… what a spectacular and haunting image. I do love how you managed to use pseudoknot
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Thank you!
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Your word choices gave me a chill and “pseudoknot” found a home.Thanks for rising to the challenge!!
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Thank you for the challenge itself and your kind words! ❤️
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I know
you’re killing me
Love the tongue in cheek twist that makes it very interesting
Hank
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Thank you, Hank!
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A creative ‘knot’ indeed! Loving the lines “and gutted solstice
endless in your eyes
I know
you’re killing me”
I feel this. If solstice is gutted, more than I is dying in forty four words.
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Aww, thank you. ❤
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