skin on hand
lavender rises
hugged by madsuns
in whiteandyellow; the moon
flutes the rain, abandoned by
alltheflowers and the rain
is deathfluttering
i fear, the spine to
its leaf that blows
etceteraetcetera
ladyleafofLazarus
does not leave
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I tried (emphasis on tried) to do an E.E. Cummings style/format here, so if you were wondering about that, guilty as charged.
Hope you could enjoy my poem. Thank you for reading.
Pseudopsychosis. 
41 responses to “lady leaf of laz.”
“I tried (emphasis on tried) to do an E.E. Cummings style/format here, so if you were wondering about that, guilty as charged.”
Um it’s gud so I dunno what the emphasis is for 😂
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Lol. Thank you!
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Very nice, Lucy! Old e.e. would be pleased as punch 😀
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I could only hope he would be. Thank you so much! ❤ ❤
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What a beautiful experiment. I wish I could write like you! ❤
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Aw shucks. I thank you so much, Smita. What a sweet thing to say. ❤ ❤
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Wow Lucy beautifully awesome ❤️
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Thank you so much!
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This is absolutely gorgeous! E.E would be proud 😀
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Why, thank you Sanaa! I sure would hope he’d be.
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I was just thinking this sounds like E.E. Cummings and then at the bottom it says that’s what you were going for!
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Hahaha, thank you so much! I am so glad you could tell what style I was going for before the A/N. 😀 That makes me real happy. Thank you.
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Oh, I think you got the style wonderfully! And that title: I would like you to write an epic poem on this subject!
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Thank you so much. Maybe one day…
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I think we need a return to long-form poetry. All literary magazines seem to insist on 40 lines. T.S. Eliot wouldn’t have stood a chance…
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You have given me some food for thought. I will have to create a longer draft of this piece sometime, it’s brewing in my mind.
I used to write long poetry a bit, but it does get draining. 😅 I agree with you though, long-form poetry has been missed and it needs a revival.
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I know we’ve been doing a lot of short form poetry on Twitter and I like that too…but this could be a springboard for something longer!
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I’ve definitely been growing too comfortable with short-form poetry. Thank you always for your encouragement. I think this has the potential to be a much longer poem as well; and I guess I have more to say! 😁
Thank you again. ❤️❤️
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I’m excited to hear it 😊
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I greatly enjoyed how you created new words with smaller words 🙂
Lovely.
-David
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Thanks, David!
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e.e. cummings is one of my favorite poets, I love attempting to write in his style. Good job, Ms. Lucy!
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Thank you so much, Helen!
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Apologies for reading and commenting late, but after the live OLN, I was so tired, and we had the electrician in yesterday to sort out the heating – there is still none in the study or dining room! The first words that leaped out at me, Lucy, were ‘lavender rises’. I changed the bedclothes the other day, sprinkled lavender oil on the pillows, and I’ve been waking up with the scent in my hair! I love the shape and form of your poem, the compression of words, and especially the imagery of the moon in the lines:
‘…the moon
flutes the rain, abandoned by
alltheflowers and the rain
is deathfluttering’.
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Thank you so very much!
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Reblogged this on words garden.
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Thank you for sharing!
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Best wishes-
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A lovely experiment, Lucy! I love “in whiteandyellow; the moon
flutes the rain.” I often write about the moon humming or singing, but I also thought about a flute shape here, and the moon sort of siphoning the rain into it.
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Aww, thank you so much.
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You’re welcome!
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I enjoyed reading this entry.
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Glad to hear it.
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
WELL-DONE-!
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Thank you!
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UR WELCOME! LUCY!
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I like – as I like e e c – G:)
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Thank you! 😃
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