i.
black coat / I see death / in the moon /
and hawks nest / one worm / New York
drinks the flowers, I could imagine,
if I ever had a dream
it was not like this / bone split open and blooms /
ii.
it’s the snow, it’s the / cold / two fingers
on the stone before it’s placed on
half a year / later / makes the Earth
in flaming petals / to move its skeleton
on the rock / phantoms get drunk,
and hide to the blue shoreline
like some kind of war / where no man dies /
I count the bones / and recall a garden /
and recall / a glass figurine I broke /
on mother’s dresser / I go into the blue lupines,
and birdfoots / I leave orange petals
to go dying / to drown / the sunset
iii.
the cemetery is red
I kill / the time / the winter
is soon / and frost in early morning
is dead / but you’re roofed
in the coffin / as the stone
hides your ghosts;
I tug the black coat. I see death in the moon
begin to rise like moccasins.
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36 responses to “ii.”
phenomenal Lucy! xo
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Thank you! 💗
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Sensational 👍
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Thank you so much. 😊
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Hi Lucy.. I’ve read your piece twice… maybe It’s me, because I’ve had an anxiety attack today, but I’m interpreting your words as a pandemic poem of suffering ang gloom, and with a harsh winter looming…. Maybe I’m seeing your words as representing myself today…. don’t worry… I’m tired, It’s time to give myself a rest…
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Hope you’re doing okay now, Ivor. I’m so sorry about the anxiety attack. The pandemic has caused an awful lot of anxiety and the best thing I agree with is to get some rest. Hang in there. 💕
As for the poem, I didn’t really have the pandemic in mind, though that’s left to the reader to interpret their own way, the intent of the piece. I kept thinking back to harsh winters representing grief or death, but I think this can definitely apply to the pandemic as well with those thoughts and feelings of abandon.
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I’m in bed resting., haha I’m pleased my interpretation was reasonably close… 😊
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I always like the words you put in your poems… Well done again! ❤
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Aww, thank you! ❤
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Wow!!
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Thank you!
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My pleasure!!❣❣
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This poem stuck with me after I finished it. Never before have I read of the moon and moccasins together, so I love those potent ending lines: “I tug the black coat. I see death in the moon/ begin to rise like moccasins.”
Makes me think of delicate beadwork and quiet feet, yet the mention of death brings a chilling and beautiful aspect to it!
Thanks so much for sharing!
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Aww, thank you dearly Jaya. I so appreciate your feedback, it warms my heart. I’m beyond happy you enjoyed my poem. 😃
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NIce. Good work.
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Thanks.
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A very morbid poem, that seems to reflect the beginnings and endings of life.
You can get lost in this sort of imagery! I’ve been re-reading over and over, again, and there’s just so much.
I like how you expressed a bit of jealousy towards the dead person beneath the earth, naming them to be “roofed”, like not cold by the winter. The twice repetition of the jacket makes me remember the coldness that seemingly only a live person feels, though encompasses the skin of a corpse.
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Thank you so, so much. There’s definitely feelings of resentment and jealousy at the dead person in this piece. Such an amazing analysis of my little poem here. I appreciate what you perceived from this piece. Always thankful for your feedback. ❤️
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You are welcome for it. 🙂
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“In flaming petals”
Wonderful work 👏
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Thank you. 🙂
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❤ ❤
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vivid. haunting. full of emotions. epic imagery, too!
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Thank you so much!
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oh.my.goodness.i.love.thisssss🌌🌑🌓🌙
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Aww, I’m so happy you do. Thank you, Kay! 😊
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Yes, Lucy!Your most welcome💫💫💫
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💗💗
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Hey, there! I hope you are doing good. I nominated you for The Leibster Award. Please check out my blog Gratitude for Nominations I for more details.
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Awesome pen-game Lucy,do check out my page, I just posted MY VERY FIRST
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“I count the bones / and recall a garden /
and recall / a glass figurine I broke /
on mother’s dresser / I go into the blue lupines,
and birdfoots / I leave orange petals
to go dying / to drown / the sunset” ❤ ❤ ❤
I’m sad and elated at the same time, amazing Lucy.
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Thank you. 💖
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Very gothic, Lucy – I love it! I especially liked the lines:
“the cemetery is red
I kill / the time / the winter”
The use of the backlash between “kill” and “the time” was great.
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Thank you so much, Nick!
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orange moon
big swoon
gone so soon
your name
the light
is right
me i m uptight
my ass
constricts
and conflicts
with the laws
of God
so often
such a liar
and a hypocrit too
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