blanket me.

Disturbs alone / a knot of darkness
in the bridle and umbrage
blanketing the red koi leaves of grass / the ambrosiac death
naked in a dance / under the moon; heart whittled / a sea sings the backbone and root of grief
remembering once the mantric lights.


Written for the dVerse prompt: Use blanket as a noun, adjective, or verb. Describe a blanket, real or imagined. Make a blanket statement. Be cozy, dark, sensual, or funny. Maybe you want to blanket us with sunshine or warmth or blanket us under snow. Your choice, as long as your poem is 44 words.

Reposted 7/12/2021.


65 responses to “blanket me.”

  1. I love that in among the darkness and ‘ambrosiac death’ there is rich colour in the ‘red koi leaves of grass’, Ingrid. I also love the bleakness of the lines, ‘heart whittled / a sea sings the backbone and root of grief’.

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  2. Lucy, I’m awed by these phrases, “abrosiac death,” “mantric lights”: the desire and compulsion driving the persona into a “knot of darkness” is powerfully executed in your imagery. Amazing.

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  3. Hello lucy.
    So much to love here. I am a fan of the / slash. : )

    the whittled hard is such a vicious image as well. death is rather a naked dance. You are no longer encumbered with the need to cover everything. grief is definitely a tangible emotion as well. felt as i concluded my reading.

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    • Thank you so much, Brian, for your thoughts and feedback. I like using the slash here and there, used to use it a lot a year ago I think. I love what you interpreted from my piece and that is more or less what I intended when writing it. ❤

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  4. Really exceptional writing!
    I loved the words “the ambrosiac death, naked in a dance”, you have a great quality of evoking thoughts by using the right words. Even “a knot of death” was a great first line. Amazing piece, felt every word of it ❤❤

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