Disturbs alone / a knot of darkness
in the bridle and umbrage
blanketing the red koi leaves of grass / the ambrosiac death
naked in a dance / under the moon; heart whittled / a sea sings the backbone and root of grief
remembering once the mantric lights.
Written for the dVerse prompt: Use blanket as a noun, adjective, or verb. Describe a blanket, real or imagined. Make a blanket statement. Be cozy, dark, sensual, or funny. Maybe you want to blanket us with sunshine or warmth or blanket us under snow. Your choice, as long as your poem is 44 words.
Reposted 7/12/2021.
65 responses to “blanket me.”
To me there is a death wish in this poem Lucy… the ambrosiac death, dancing makes me long for such a moment, but then in then you turn it into grief which really makes it ambivalent
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I can see those parallels about a death wish. I combine both aspects–grief and desire, I think. Thank you so much for your feedback. It’s always appreciated. 🙂
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I love the “heart whittled” imagery. I may have to try this word prompt. Good one!
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Thank you!
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I love that in among the darkness and ‘ambrosiac death’ there is rich colour in the ‘red koi leaves of grass’, Ingrid. I also love the bleakness of the lines, ‘heart whittled / a sea sings the backbone and root of grief’.
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Thank you so, so much.
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Lovely imagery. Part of it seems like it could be the dying of the seasons. I like sea singing and mourning.
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Thank you so much. I definitely had that thought in mind.
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I like the red koi leaves of grass, a very striking and original image.
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Thank you!
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Always challenging out-there writing Lucy. ‘remembering once the mantric lights’ – is the memorable line – for me evokes a dark sea and far off the city’s lights reflected in the troubled waters.
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Thank you, Peter. 🙂
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I get an image here of cold dark water and decomposing leaves floating on the surface. Things really shut down for the season…
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You would be right. Thank you so much, as always, Lisa. ❤
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You’re very welcome, Lucy.
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Gorgeously evocative! I love; “a sea sings the backbone and root of grief.” 🙂
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Thank you, Sanaa.
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I hope the blanket warms your soul….
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Thank you.
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I hope the blanket warms your soul….
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I specially love this part: a sea sings the backbone and root of grief
The voice cries out in solitude, in deep reflection.
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Thank you, Grace. 🙂
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kaykuala
Classic poetic language, Lucy! You are blessed with such talents well shown in all of your previous postings! Great!
Hank
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Hank, I thank you so much. It’s an honor!
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Lucy, I’m awed by these phrases, “abrosiac death,” “mantric lights”: the desire and compulsion driving the persona into a “knot of darkness” is powerfully executed in your imagery. Amazing.
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Thank you, Dora. 🙂
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BEAUTIFUL LUCY! lOVE IT! XO
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Thank you so much!
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“the ambrosiac death
naked in a dance”
This makes me think of a Bacchanalia taken to the ultimate excess.
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Intriguing comparison! Thank you for your feedback.
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A very beautiful and powerful poem. I liked the words you used.
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Thank you very much.
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Luv your imaging of the season changes
Happy Monday
Much💖love
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I’m happy to hear that! Thank you.
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Sick flow & crazy imagery….what not to like….
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Thanks. 😊
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You’re welcome 😊
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Lucy this is brilliant. What a great read!
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Thank you, Rob!
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‘the ambrosiac death’ – what a haunting image: something seductive about death in a cold season perhaps.
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Thank you so much, Ingrid.
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goldfish leaves of autumn, grief and dancing under the moon. Lots of swirling images.
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Thank you. 🙂
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that knot of darkness can bind us (K)
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Indeed, it can. Thank you for the feedback.
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Everyone has said it all so I shall add that I love the imagery your words evoked. Beautiful.
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Thank you so much. 🙂
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Lucy,
I love, “heart whittled” It is a clever way to describe the pain.
Thanks for sharing your words.
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Thank you. 🙂
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“ambrosiac death” stabbed at me. Sometimes you can feel or imagine how sweet death could be. Only my opinion, of course. Fabulous poem, Lucy!
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That is indeed true, at times. Thank you so much! 🙂
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Amazing piece. Loved it.❤️
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Thank you so much! ❤
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Truly my pleasure.💕
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Great poem and use of the blanket.
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Thank you!
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Hello lucy.
So much to love here. I am a fan of the / slash. : )
the whittled hard is such a vicious image as well. death is rather a naked dance. You are no longer encumbered with the need to cover everything. grief is definitely a tangible emotion as well. felt as i concluded my reading.
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Thank you so much, Brian, for your thoughts and feedback. I like using the slash here and there, used to use it a lot a year ago I think. I love what you interpreted from my piece and that is more or less what I intended when writing it. ❤
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pond
lazy orange
fish
as much as i wish
kiss kiss kiss
away
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Beautiful
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Thank you!
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My pleasure ❤️🤗
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Really exceptional writing!
I loved the words “the ambrosiac death, naked in a dance”, you have a great quality of evoking thoughts by using the right words. Even “a knot of death” was a great first line. Amazing piece, felt every word of it ❤❤
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Thank you so much! ❤
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You’re most welcome!
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