Alive (to drown).

Original draft.

Shudder, these leaves scuffle
in the admission of winter
in the yellowing stillness
that faces you, bleeding mindlessness;
You are a fool, you are death,
where eyes decipher
the plea in the thorns
of a mother’s tree,
and the godhood in the horizon,
that wept in smothered dark,
alone in Elysium
labor in the embrace
the tumult of colors in the sky
illuming disarray at the end,
alive to drown.

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Revised version.

Shudder, these leaves scuffle
the admission of winter
in the yellowing stillness
that faces you, bleeding mindlessness;
You are a fool, you are death,
where eyes decipher
and wept in the dark
alone in Elysium
labor in the embrace,
illuming disarray at the end,
alive to drown.

© 2020 Pseudopsychosis All Rights Reserved.

Reposted 7/14/2021.

46 thoughts on “Alive (to drown).”

  1. A beautifully sad eulogy of the god-man drowning in his discontent. At the same time, there is a kind of heroic striving in this. Death has pathos only because of the struggle to live, even if that struggle ultimately is futile and mindless. The same water that drowns also nourishes the imagination. The imagination may be delusion, but even that is something when confronted with the sheer loneliness of Elysium. You have done a great job with expressing the torment here in naturalistic and temporal terms which heightens the drama onto a cosmological stage.

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    1. Thank you, thank you so much for your feedback. I really enjoyed reading it, and you really hit the nail on the head with the major themes communicated throughout this poem. 😀

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  2. Guess who is finally exploring Lucy’s blog hehe. I love this!! It’s haunting and eerie but beautiful at the same time, amazing piece(s)!

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