Lonesome.

Culling your humanity
to my wrists, 
my unbridled bride
take pride in that; shun
tremendum, 
she’ll never go home

I die a little more
to see you

I am lonesome, your 
malaise will stray unsought
like a marionette,
I’d only love for you to stay.

Mesmeric, I’d remember this
moment. Lost in the moon’s oneiric pocket 
disabuse your mother’s worry
spare me her cries 
she doesn’t care; my deluded sister,
I’ve seen the garden in my hell,
buried in plutonic graves

whisper
my child
each mourning unloved
but I love you;
your final resolve

[I]
 fell and fast
first frost and finally coquelicot death.

© 2021 Pseudopsychosis All Rights Reserved.

Written for the 08/03/2021 dVerse poetics prompt.

72 thoughts on “Lonesome.”

  1. This prompt was made for you! Deliciously woven, the imagery courses through and through like waves, I especially love; “I am lonesome, your malaise will stray unsought like a marionette,
    I’d only love for you to stay.”💝💝

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  2. Beautifully capturing the nature of the relationship and the mind of someone who is justifying their unjust behavior.

    I am curious about your writing process that pulls in such uncommon words such as tremendum and oneiric, do you seek out such rare words or do you just have them ready off hand? As I shared before, I like your use of these words because it reads less generic with them sprinkled in, and forces the reader to pay attention.

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    1. Thank you so much! I actually do seek those words out while reading different poems to get inspired, or I just implement the ones I remember utilizing before in the past with my poetry.

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  3. I can definitely feel Persephone coming through in this, Lucy, a lost raw side to her. Some gorgeous turns of phrase. My favourite lines:

    “I die a little more to see you.” – so evocative!

    “Your malaise will stray unsought like a marionette.”

    “[I]
    fell and fast
    first frost and finally coquelicot death.”

    And quite simply the words “tremendous”and “plutonic” are a win for me. Great piece ❤

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    1. You’re not only close, you’re right on the money here. It was an experience to get into a narcissist’s head and love bomb Persephone this way as if I were Hades, but it’s also sadly relatable in unhealthy relationships. I always thought Hades and Persephone would have that type of dynamic, if not worse. Thank you so much, Lisa. 🙂

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  4. Beautiful, intriguing, captivating, mystical — these are certainly among the words your writing always stirs to my emotional surface. I sometimes feel disingenuous calling them to service so often in my comments to your work — like I am being insincere. But still they come, and they are all this poor fool has to offer… in other words Lucy — I really like your poetic shit, it kicks ass! 👍😉✌🏼

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    1. Oh Rob, I never felt that you were disingenuous with your praise. It really means a lot to me that you enjoy my writing and the encouragement you give helps me keep doing that as I’ve certainly had times where I just wanted to quit poetry. Thank you so, so much. ❤

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  5. I love your poetry, Lucy, but I find it hard to read in red on black. It’s probably my age, but my eyes don’t seem to focus well enough. Thought I’d mention it – maybe no one else has the same problem?

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    1. Thank you so much, Polly, but I am sorry to hear about this issue. This would be the first time of someone telling me this specifically, but I definitely want to make it easier to read for you. 🙂 My color scheme is red and black, but let me see if I can play around with the coloring a bit when I get the chance. Thank you again for letting me know!

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  6. You’ve definitely expressed a toxic relationship, Lucy. I like how Lisa put it– love bombed by a narcissist. I like the alliteration at the end–it makes the words stand out but also flow at the end.

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  7. whisper my child
    each mourning unloved
    but I love you;
    your final resolve

    Love this Lucy! A fitting take on a mother’s love. It is giving vent to feelings of regret and desperation of her missing daughter. much as a final resolution to losing hope. It even runs smack against a likely unnatural relationship between the father and daughter. Powerful rendition Ma’am!

    Hank

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    1. Thank you so much, Hank! I love your interpretation of this piece. I wrote it through the perspective of Hades manipulating his child bride, but with the lines you mentioned, I can definitely see the mother’s love take.

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  8. What Rob said, and more, Lucy. You are a font, an aquifer of dark creativity. This is the only poem I’ve seen that takes on Hades’ POV, which you did in spades–so much so that you sprinted past sarcasm, and created empathy for Hades; not an easy task.

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    1. Thank you so very much, Glenn. I really appreciate your kind words and support much more than you’d know. ❤️❤️

      It was weird diving into Hades’ point of view especially when he manipulates Persephone, but I’m glad I was able to do it.

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    1. Well, I wrote it through the perspective of Hades as he love bombs and manipulates Persephone into feeling guilty for leaving for spring. Thank you, though.

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