I pull her free into the garden;
my son sat at the windowsill while
the salix speaks about to be born,
alone, we were fooled by love’s beguile.
Define maddening, I’ll give you my fantasy
ecstasy; in my valise, a phone was born
unplugged. Alone, I was fooled by her beguile
when the salix was about to be born.
I bartered ant death to ant dream,
I wish I never knew its wiles/
its murderous/ salix about to be born
alone, I was fooled by love’s beguile.
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Written for the 08/12/2021 dVerse prompt: Mirrored Refrain.
I admit, I was exhausted when writing this poem, so I hope I got the rhyme scheme down while playing with the form a little.
46 responses to “Love’s song.”
A beguiling love song, Lucy but a paradox. I like the conflicting emotions in this line:
alone, I was fooled by love’s beguile.
Thanks for joining in. I hope it was not too exhausting after all. Here’s some bubble ice tea for you! Have a good day!
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Thank you so much, Grace! I’ll also gladly take the ice tea. 😀 Have a great day and weekend.
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valise … valise … oh, how I love the smooth sound and intoxicating scent of that cool word!
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Thank you! 😀
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You always write the most intriguing posts, Lucy!
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Aww, thank you!
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~~ in my valise, a phone was born unplugged … this line in particular grabbed me and wouldn’t let go! A stunning poem, Lucy.
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Thank you so much, Helen.
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Your poem has an ominous vibe and I think I should close my eyes when that salix is born! The imagery is so unique, as usual in all your works!
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Aww, thank you so much. ❤ ❤
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Great rhyming Lucy! You got the perfect words to rhyme together eg ‘wiles’ and ‘beguile’ among them!
Hank
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Thank you, Hank!
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you picked a tough rhyming scheme and pulled it off, Lucy, the twist on love song to love’s song is creative and i feel this worked so well with hidden menace vibe.
this lines are too good:I bartered ant death to ant dream,
I wish I never knew its wiles/
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*these 😀
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Thank you so very much! 😀
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I must say you pulled off that rhyming scheme pretty well. I can tell that it wasn’t an easy task and that makes it even more better. It’s always so nice to see this creative side of you, always trying on something new. Really well written Lucy, this works wonders ❤
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Honestly, it was difficult making it flow altogether but I’m very happy you think it works. ❤ dVerse provides so many opportunities for us to try new things with their prompts, I like to take a little stabby stab at it lol.
Thank you so much for your thoughtful responses, I really appreciate and enjoy reading them, AB!
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Thanks for sharing that, I’ll definitely check it out and might try taking a stabby stab at it too, haha!
It’s always a pleasure reading your work and learning something new 🙂
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love this
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Aww, thank you. I’m glad to hear that!
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I love the imagery here, Lucy: still trying to tie it together in my mind; I had to look up ‘salix’ — and yes, we had a weeping willow in our backyard but maddeningly it displayed none of the visual revelry of this salix 🙂
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Thank you so very much! ❤
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So original and intriguing!! Amazing images, and I agree with previews comments, an ominous feel to this write.😨
🙏
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Thank you so very much, Didier!
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The disappointment. 😦 A beautiful write. I had to look up salix. I gather it’s a plant. It’s a fascinating addition to the poem… an extra detail that has me curious.
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Aww, thank you. 😀
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Salix had me flummoxed! But I have come to expect the unexpected from you, Lucy. 😀
Compelling read.
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Thank you so much! 😁
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My pleasure. 😊
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Vivid as ever, Lucy. Makes me think of that moment in an eerie film when all appears well on the surface but then someone breaks a magical rule and serene very soon turns into chaos ❤
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Aww, thank you and I can definitely see that too.
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Always intriguing Lucy – and demanding to be read several times, like all good poetry.
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Thank you so much! 😀
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your rhyming flows,
and the tree knows
our curiosity grows
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Hahaha, indeed!
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congrats on all your publications, well done!
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Aww, thank you! 😀
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well deserved!
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❤️❤️
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“I bartered ant death to ant dream.” Love this line, Lucy.
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Thank you, Jeff!
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You’re most welcome!
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Lovely
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Thanks!
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WoW!!!
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Thank you!
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