Solitude’s simplest explanation.

Strange forgottens, Medusa’s eyes
left me here. A mirror for what I let die.

from my cynicism, my garden of regrets
in a woman’s beautiful face,

I stay as the monk’s ghost
linger like Arabia’s perfumes

Garden bones dangle in illusion
of our homes. Leave me alone,

memories waylay into absence
self-portraits of a baby Pharaoh

strangling in the rib-cage
decathect from convex blooms

Mother, father, cannot be ashamed
but I refuse to let myself feel it

I considered apathy at one point
maybe even psychopathic tendencies

just not to feel anything beyond me
in solitude’s Occam’s razor.

© 2021 Pseudopsychosis All Rights Reserved.


Final Draft Version.

Strange forgottens, Medusa’s eyes
left me here. A mirror for what I let die.

Blood-soaked alphanumeric lights
almost intense on the sand;

it attracted me
in abandonment. It was magnificent.

from my cynicism, my garden of regrets
in a woman’s beautiful face,

I stay as the monk’s ghost
linger like Arabia’s perfumes

perverse, to crush one’s hopes
before I ever got the chance to find out;

Garden bones languidly dangle in illusion
of our homes. It’s only a ghost to me now.

Leave me be in idle words
and fragrance, le mystèrea face smiles;

memories waylay into absence
self-portraits of baby Pharaoh

strangling in the rib-cage
decathect from convex blooms

Mother, father, cannot be ashamed
but I refuse to let myself feel it

I considered apathy at one point
maybe even psychopathic tendencies

just not to feel anything beyond me
in solitude’s Occam’s razor.

© 2021 Pseudopsychosis All Rights Reserved.


Written for the 08/17/2021 dVerse poetics prompt:

  • Write a poem that’s loosely based on Korean folklore. You may opt to create a tale of your own in regard to a myth or legend you might have discovered.    0R
  • Write a poem using the Poetic form “Kasa.” The choice of topic is entirely up to you.

I guess I kind of mixed both in this piece. I tried to follow the Kasa form, but I was too lazy to count syllables. I didn’t even realize this piece could follow the folklore with Lee Yeon. Sort of.

I edited the poem a bit. I’ll leave both versions here for comparison.

57 thoughts on “Solitude’s simplest explanation.”

  1. Wow! This is deliciously dark and enticing, Lucy! I especially love; “I stay as the monk’s ghost linger like Arabia’s perfumes.” Thank you so much for writing to the prompt. 💝💝

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  2. Delicious and dark, it takes the Kasa to new heights. You met the prompt parameters and still created your chilling version of it. Another winner.

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  3. Goodness, another fantastical and delightful bit of poetry. I cannot comment further than anyone else here, but I admit that “I considered apathy at once point / maybe even psychopathic tendencies / just not to feel anything beyond me / in solitude’s Occam’s razor.” to be particularly pleasant to my eye. As always, I adore the language and the foggy imagery you seem so skilled at manipulating. Kudos!

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    1. Oh wow, Masa, this is quite the compliment! I’m so glad you enjoyed this piece and I thank you for your feedback and kind praise. Admittedly, those final few lines were my favorite in this piece and I’m glad you liked them too. Thank you so, so much. ❤

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  4. To be honest, I loved the first part. Moving on to the final draft, I loved it even more. It was really intense and dark, yet the words had such a smooth flow to them. There were so many thoughtful lines so exceptionally written. You’ve mastered the art. Loved both the versions Lucy ❤

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